flower in hand
this date does not come easy
but I knew it would happen
I truly just can't let go.
Standing there motionless
wondering why it had to be you
crying because of the memory
looking back is not easy.
Only 11 year in my life
but they were the best
always looking out and caring for me
but in this date I cry all the time
not because I am mad but because
I miss you mom.
October 8,2011
This is so powerful! I like how it's a little shorter but still beautiful, just like your mother was only here for a short while but made a wonderful impact on your life
ReplyDeleteWow. This is extremely powerful and moving. I think I'm going to cry. This is a lovely piece of work.
ReplyDeleteTheres not much I can really say because these piece does make me kinda speechless. It really moved me and I feel like I can almost feel this persons pain by how powerful it is.
ReplyDeleteI love this. Almost as much as I love the simplicity and power behind the words. Easily relatable as well as something hard to understand. This poem really brings someone to their knees.
ReplyDeleteI think what I like most about this piece, and other pieces like it, is that it is not until the end that you find out who the mystery person is. It could be a lover that passed away, a grandparent, a sibling, a pet, etc. But it forces the reader to go through the entire experience of the poem before they can find out who it was about, even if sometimes they don't always state who it was.
ReplyDeleteThis is truly beautiful and it is almost like you are experiencing the pain with the writer. Your work piece is truly strong and powerful.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is sweet, simple and meaningful. I like it.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is sweet, simple and meaningful. I like it.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was absolutely beautiful. Extremely well done, I could definitely feel your emotions.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was absolutely beautiful. Extremely well done, I could definitely feel your emotions.
ReplyDeleteThere is so much emotion in just a few lines, and I like that. It's really sad, though.
ReplyDeleteI really like this it's really amazing. I really like how it is written.
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