Driving down this winding road,
The green of the trees blur together .
The faster I drive past,
The leaves change and whither .
The sky is clear from clouds,
A family of birds flying in a V .
Those beautiful marshmallows roll in,
Time to replace this old short sleeve .
I step out of my time machine,
I rest in the plush grass .
Pulling my wool's buttons together,
The snowy blades hurt my skin like glass .
The moon trades with the sun,
But this change is only temporary .
Those sweet leaves have gone,
The blanket of grass has worn away .
I put my car in reverse,
Will be revived .
I loved how I could visualize everything happening in the poem. Great job with that. And I LOVED the first stanza.
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Deleterebirth is when something is born again. Is this about the change in the weather from fall to winter? or is there a deeper meaning hidden within the poem?
ReplyDeleteJust for visual affect it is from summer to winter, but there is a deeper meaning into this poem.
DeleteThe imagery of the poem was amazing. The use of color gave the poem depth and new meaning. What I got from the poem is that color is the essence of life.Just as the colors are changing throughout the poem, life is ever changing.
ReplyDeleteThe first stanza is very relatable to life and how it shows that the faster you go (driving in your car) the objects around you blur together, and when you don't stop and realize your surroundings you leave out precious moments and miss beautiful sights that are rarely seen again. This gave me a message that life is to short to be rushed through.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line is "I step out of my time machine"
ReplyDeleteWhatever was going on with you at the time you wrote this, the time you wrote about, or the time you made up, I somehow felt it with you. I sat with you in the passenger's seat and felt the snowy cold, saw the birds, felt the pain.
I sometimes feel like my car is a time machine but one that only propels me forward into a life I have set on auto-pilot.
This poem made me feel. Thank you
The imagery of this is swaying me towards the idea that it's about the change in seasons; but another is telling me it has a deeper meaning. Maybe even a change in feelings?
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy your use of colors in this. The way you took advantage of it really painted a picture for the readers.
I loved this first stanza because it is the truth. But the entire reading was beyond amazing because I could see myself doing all these things and those are my favorite type of reading. The way you worded things to make the reader feel and see the lines was great, I would just like to know what and who this is about.
ReplyDeleteThis is about me. It is about my past four years (meaning while I'm in high school). From the littlest things to the life changing experiences, I want to go back and relive it all. Turning 18 and becoming an adult is a scary thing, and I wish I could have a little more time to just savor my learning years.
DeleteWhat a powerful moment you captured! Could you talk to us a little about the creative process of this poem? Was it written live, in the moment, or was this a mused memory?
ReplyDeleteI echo the praises of the powerful use of imagery!
This poem was based off of my four years of high school. Not so much the aspect of school life, but everything that has happened, the good and bad. It hit me that since I'm 18 now, and that I am graduating, that I can't go back and savor the best moments more. The most crucial stages of my growing life are over and the most precious memories are just that now, memories. This poem reflects how I want it all back to relive it all again.
DeleteHey!!! I responded but apparently it didn't post! I said I've known you for awhile and
ReplyDeleteIt's really interesting to see a diffent side of you that isn't a math or science class would u mind explaining how this came to be!? :0
Explain this poem, or my more creative side? The poem explanation is under Papa T's comment.
DeleteThis is a great poem. I am a little confused as to what it is about though.
ReplyDeletethe imagery in the poem is amazing. I loved how real it felt.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line is "The snowy blades hurt my skin like glass" that line sticks out from the rest, the wording is amazing and the whole poem spoke to me and I felt like it was so real.
ReplyDeleteI would have to agree that the snowy blades hurt my skin like glass automatically caught my attention. I re read this Poem several times to really visualize everything. I also really enjoyed the fact that this poem was in first person. I connected with it on a stronger level.
ReplyDeleteWhen I think of reviving, I think of how the sky is blue each day. Each day is new and a fresh start. I also associate blue with peace. After something in life is revived, there is a strong feeling of peace in the situation.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you used time and change synonymously. It reveals the truth that as time passes things inevitably change. You revealed this by discussing how the seasons change in nature, which strengthens your point that change is as inevitable as the changing of the seasons.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite stanza is the first, because I can literally imagine looking out the car window and seeing the trees blend together while driving. I also really love the line "the moon trades with the sun".
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